Story: MBSH’s Varsity Football Team Catches a New Wave
Section: Sports
Deadline: Friday
In general, I think your story is about:
The Beach high Football team is starting to win after having a horrible year last season. THe team and its reputation is improving.
I think the facts of this story are: According to:
Who? THe Beach High Football team
What? Is winning
Where? Beach High
When? This year
Why?
How? A game winning field goal.and players improvement
I think the most important elements of your story are:
How Beach High won their first game and what the players think of the winning
This is how I would rewrite your lead:
THis year tHe Beach High football team is starting to win due to clutch plays and player improvement.
Terms or ideas you need to explain in your own words or with quotes:
How the coach feels about the success and what theplayers think about the coach.
Names of sources you should still talk to for quotes:
1. Coach Hayes
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aarong2010 // October 12, 2007 at 1:33 am
Name: Aaron Groff
Story: MBSH’s Varsity Football Team Catches a New Wave
Section: Sports
Deadline: Friday
In general, I think your story is about:
The Beach high Football team is starting to win after having a horrible year last season. THe team and its reputation is improving.
I think the facts of this story are: According to:
Who? THe Beach High Football team
What? Is winning
Where? Beach High
When? This year
Why?
How? A game winning field goal.and players improvement
I think the most important elements of your story are:
How Beach High won their first game and what the players think of the winning
This is how I would rewrite your lead:
THis year tHe Beach High football team is starting to win due to clutch plays and player improvement.
Terms or ideas you need to explain in your own words or with quotes:
How the coach feels about the success and what theplayers think about the coach.
Names of sources you should still talk to for quotes:
1. Coach Hayes
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